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Re: Script review

Posted: Tue Jun 30, 2009 11:35 am
by Teaos
Klingons having cloak is a bit disapointing. I liked the idea of them trading the Romulans for it.

Re: Script review

Posted: Tue Jun 30, 2009 3:31 pm
by Mikey
That's just a reviewer talking about an unfinished script idea. I'd as easily replace "decloak" with "appear" and let it go on from there.

Interestingly, I see very little in this article that I think would have bettered the film by being included. Bringing in the Klingons would be unnecessary, as would the more drawn-out exploration of young "good-boy" Kirk. The locket scene with Shatner singing to Spock would have been too saccharine (and they couldn't get Shat anyway.) The only thing that might have been nice would have been the more detailed explanation of Kirk's defeat of the Kobayashi Maru.

Re: Script review

Posted: Thu Jul 02, 2009 9:35 am
by steamrunner
Mikey wrote:The only thing that might have been nice would have been the more detailed explanation of Kirk's defeat of the Kobayashi Maru.
Didn't he just re-write the software program?

Re: Script review

Posted: Thu Jul 02, 2009 1:09 pm
by Tyyr
I have to agree, aside from the Orion chick getting more screen time it doesn't look like we lost anything.

Re: Script review

Posted: Thu Jul 02, 2009 7:24 pm
by Mikey
steamrunner wrote:
Mikey wrote:The only thing that might have been nice would have been the more detailed explanation of Kirk's defeat of the Kobayashi Maru.
Didn't he just re-write the software program?
Yeah, but according to that article the original proposition was to show how he did it with more subterfuge involving Gaila.

Re: Script review

Posted: Fri Jul 03, 2009 5:52 pm
by Graham Kennedy
In the movie as presented, Kirk is basically sleeping with her because she's hot. So it just plays into the womanising thing he has going on.

With the deleted scene, he is basically sleeping with her as a way to crack the simulation. It makes Kirk look rather more cynical and manipulative, especially given that she tells him she loves him along the way. It kinda makes him come off as a douche. I wonder if that's not why they cut it.

Re: Script review

Posted: Fri Jul 03, 2009 6:55 pm
by Mikey
His response when she told him she loved him kinda makes him look like a douche anyway...

Re: Script review

Posted: Sat Jul 04, 2009 12:26 am
by IanKennedy
Mikey wrote:His response when she told him she loved him kinda makes him look like a douche anyway...
Well, less of one if he said he loves her and didn't, surely?

Re: Script review

Posted: Mon Jul 06, 2009 2:48 pm
by Tyyr
A douche is a douche. Personally I think just losing the "I love you" from Gaila would have been a good idea to me. After all can't they just be two horny cadets having some fun and she is an Orion female after all.

Re: Script review

Posted: Wed Jul 08, 2009 9:40 am
by Mark
Shatner-Kirk would have smiled and started up again. Uhura be damned.

Re: Script review

Posted: Wed Jul 08, 2009 1:00 pm
by Tyyr
He would have asked her to join in.

Re: Script review

Posted: Wed Jul 08, 2009 6:51 pm
by Mark
And instead of going after Spock, she would have.

Re: Script review

Posted: Thu Jul 09, 2009 9:32 am
by steamrunner
:D

Re: Script review

Posted: Fri Jul 10, 2009 5:33 pm
by thelordharry
I've been thinking....that 'motorcycle' (hovercycle?) copper in the Young Kirk car scene. What was he, like a humanoid in armour or was he like a android?

Re: Script review

Posted: Fri Jul 10, 2009 6:25 pm
by Mikey
I had guessed a human in armor - armor designed for intimidation more than functionality - as well as hugely ridiculous jodhpurs.