The Scene for Captain Kirk

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Apparently the scene that Orci and Kurtzman wrote for William Shatner in the new Star Trek movie has been made public. I honestly think I like that ending a little better, it ties everything together more I believe. Here is the link, and below is the scene:

The Scene
Here it is

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ALTERNATE SCENE B

SPOCK PRIME
Then I ask that you do yourself a
favor put away logic, and do what
feels right. The world you've inherited
lives in the shadow of incalculable
devastation but there's no reason you
must face it alone.

And from around his neck, he removes the PENDANT that
until now, we've only caught glimpses of. Places it on
the table beside his younger self. The feeling in his
eyes is profound

SPOCK PRIME (CONT'D)
This was a gift to me. Representing
a dream. One we were unable to fulfill.
(softly)
The way you can now.

And moves to the door. Stops. Offers the VULCAN SALUTE:

SPOCK PRIME (CONT'D)
As my customary farewell would appear
oddly self serving, I will simply say
good luck.

Their eyes hold. Spock turns, disappearing into the
corridor. Young Spock stares at the empty doorway a
beat, his mind a jumble of thoughts. Looks to the
pendant and realizes it's a HOLO-EMITTER. After
considering a beat, he hits an activation button and a
MOVING HOLOGRAPHIC MESSAGE materializes before him:

CAPTAIN JAMES T. KIRK. WILLIAM SHATNER. As always,
brash, wry, confident - and SINGING:

KIRK/ SHATNER
Happy birthday to you, happy birthday to
you
(stops, grins)
I know I know, it's illogical to
celebrate something you had nothing to do
with, but I haven't had the chance to
congratulate you on your appointment to
the ambassadorship so I thought I'd seize
the occasion Bravo, Spock - they tell
me your first mission may take you away
for awhile, so I'll be the first to wish
you luck and to say
(beat, emotional)
I miss you, old friend.

and we're PUSHING IN on Young Spock, taking in the
image of Kirk's future self, the message, but above all -
the clear, unquestionable friendship these two men had

INT. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS
As Spock Prime walks off down the corridor, he passes
right by a man conferring with a nurse - the man pauses,
turns it's SAREK. Suddenly overcome by a feeling that
the stranger who's just passed him is oddly familiar.

KIRK/SHATNER (V.O.)
I suppose I'd always imagined us
outgrowing Starfleet together. Watching
life swing us into our Emeritus years

INT. STARBASE ONE - HANGAR - ETERNAL NIGHT

MUSIC BUILDING - glass walls reveal THE ENTERPRISE at
dock, UTILITY CRAFTS floating around it, repairing.
Standing at attention in rows, THE ENTERPRISE CREW -
over four hundred of them wearing DRESS UNIFORMS - TRACK
DOWN the faces, all proud:

KIRK/SHATNER (V.O.)
I look around at the new cadets now and
can't help thinking has it really been
so long? Wasn't it only yesterday we
stepped onto the Enterprise as boys?
That I had to prove to the crew I
deserved command and their respect?

And we STOP ON YOUNG KIRK. Composed, focused, proud. A
man. And to every fan's delight, finally wearing his
YELLOW SHIRT. The FEDERATION COMMANDANT stands at a
podium:

COMMANDANT
This assembly calls Captain James
Tiberius Kirk

Kirk breaks from formation, pivots, marches down the
hangar - past UHURA SULU CHEKOV SCOTTY. All
Beaming. Notably absent, is Spock. Kirk ascends the
stairs, snaps to attention:

COMMANDANT (CONT'D)
Your inspirational valor and supreme
dedication to your comrades are in
keeping with the highest traditions of
service and reflect utmost credit to
yourself, your crew, and the Federation.
By Starfleet Order 28455, you are hereby
directed to report to Commanding Officer,
USS Enterprise, for duty as his relief.

Kirk turns. Walks to PIKE. In a wheelchair now,
wearing an ADMIRAL'S UNIFORM. Overnight, his hair's
turned totally grey - but despite his trauma, his
pride's overwhelming. They SALUTE each other:

KIRK
I relieve you, Sir.


PIKE
I am relieved.

He opens a BOX in his lap - glorious in repose, a MEDAL:

PIKE (CONT'D)
And as Fleet Admiral, for your unique
solution to the Kobayashi Maru, it's my
honor to award you with a commendation
for original thinking.

Pike containing a smirk, pins the medal to Kirk's
chest PIKE (CONT'D)
(a touch choked)
Congratulations, Captain.

KIRK
Thank you, Sir.

Kirk turns to the crowd. Eyes shining. WILD APPLAUSE.
OUR MUSIC SOARS. Bones leans in to Sulu, rolling his
eyes:

BONES
Same ship, different day.

As Kirk rejoins his crew for hugs and congratulations, we
go to the BACK of the hangar SPOCK PRIME. Watching.
Moved beyond words. He turns and leaves them to it as
he goes

KIRK/SHATNER (V.O.)
I know what you'd say - 'It's their turn
now, Jim ' And of course you're
right but it got me thinking:

INT. STARFLEET HOSPITAL - EARTH - DAY

Our montage comes full circle as we END on Kirk's
transmission:

KIRK/SHATNER
Who's to say we can't go one more round?
By the last tally, only twenty five
percent of the galaxy's been chartered
I'd call that negligent. Criminal even -
an invitation. You once said being a
starship captain was my first, best
destiny if that's true, then yours is
to be by my side. If there's any true
logic to the universe we'll end up on
that bridge again someday.

Stops, grins. Because this is the part he needs to say
most

KIRK/SHATNER
Admit it, Spock. For people like us, the
journey itself is home.

Young Spock's face. Lost in feelings that flood through
him.

[Lt. Staplic]

That sounds really cool...I got goose bumps just reading it.

[Captain Seafort]

Hmm. I see what they meant when they said it felt shoehorned in for the sake of getting Shatner in the film.

[Mikey]

I agree with Seafort. A decoration for Kirk's performance on the Kobayashi Maru would be incredibly anomalous with the reaction his scheme had previously received in the film. To a lesser degree, but still niggling, would be Kirk's appointment to a captaincy - rather than a de facto command, as he attained in the film - and Spock's sudden, magical, unassailable friendship with Kirk based simply on divine fiat. Sarek's appearance would be both useless and baseless.

[thelordharry]

Hmmmm. I'm sure it would have given some Trekkies orgasms to see this scene but yeah, it would have added nothing to the story really and been horribly contrived. Maybe the next film will show nuTrek future Kirk and have Shatner playing the part?

[RK_Striker_JK_5]

An awesome scene, yes... but yeah. Somewhat unnecessary.

[Tyyr]

The biggest thing I have to wonder about is why would young Spock be moved? He barely knows Kirk, and mostly knows him as a brash jackass. He has no connection to the older Kirk. I can buy old Spock's urging to get him to give Starfleet a second chance but why would old Kirk mean anything to him?

[Tsukiyumi]

...why would old Kirk mean anything to him?

He feels terrible about Kirk's future hairpiece and waistline.

[Tyyr]

HA!

"It's only logical that you bed as many green skinned women as you can now because in thirty years you might find it more..." trademark Spock eyebrow, "challenging."

[Tsukiyumi]

[Mark]

So much for Shatner's "resurrection"

[Foxfyre]

So much for Shatner's "resurrection"

don't forget the hairpiece

[Mark]

What hairpiece. He doesn't wear a hairpiece. Thats a horrible rumor perpetuated by the Klingions.